Audience Feedback for Rough Cut

This is our audience feedback for our rough cut.Thankfully 5 people were generous enough to provide their opinions on our rough cut so I have gone and compiled them together and divided them into pros and cons to give an overall feedback on our rough cut. 

This is what they thought went well and was effective:two out of the 5 said that some of the camera work was good good, in  particular the tracking shots. They stated that they were quite steady although the some of the recording was done in hand they also liked the scene where the gloved hand came into frames and they said it was quite conventional to see a shot like that in a thriller. - Good edit choice of introducing the janitor mopping the floor and then cutting back to the character outside, coming in.

This is what they thought could have been improved:2 of the people who gave feedback said that some of the shots would have been better if they were wider e.g. when the character walked up the stairs, his head got cut off as he reached the top. They said we should have done practice runs to see how it looked before actually recording. The majority of the people who gave feedback also said that it was obvious that the building wasn't empty as they could hear students in the classes. Another criticism was that the scene where the mysterious figure was creeping up on Fernando could have been improved by rearranging the classroom so that the mysterious figure could sneak up in a straight line behind Fernando rather than sneaking up from the side where he could have realistically been seen by Fernando. They also stated that in one of the scenes the supervisor was smiling so they said that the acting should be improved so that the characters appearance doesn't brake. The final thing they pointed out was that the final scene where Fernando was found dead should of had a slower zoom out as they thought it was a bit too quick.

This is what they believed we had to do to improve our rough cut:
They said that we should shorten our shots as most of the scenes just show the character walking. They believed that it was important to do this as it would help to prevent the audience from not keeping engaged. They also said we should consider zooming in on the scene where the Villain looks at the phone using options on Premier Pro as it would help to keep the Villains identity hidden because if not, the Villains face would have been shown and identified. They also suggested that we should add suitable music in the background which could help enhance the elements each scene wanted to express. The final thing they though we could improve on was to consider re-shooting the killing shot with just a close up of a gloved hand covering the victims mouth. They said sometimes implying death/danger is much more powerful than showing someone getting hurt.